THE COSTUME

 

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Copyright–Douglas M. Macilroy

This is my story for Friday Fictioneers this week. This is a weekly challenge to write a story in 100 words with a beginning, middle, and end. It’s supposed to follow the picture prompt given for the week. The host for the challenge is the talented and gracious author, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week the picture prompt is a photo supplied by Douglas M. Macilroy. Thanks Douglas.

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/04/16/18-april-2014/

THE COSTUME by P.S. Joshi

Halloween is my son Bradley’s favorite holiday. At the age of ten, this year he decided to wear a costume of his own invention.

I could hear him mumbling to himself as he searched through old junk in the attic. I finally heard him yell.

“Yes!”

He came downstairs carrying his granddad’s old diving helmet.

“This is great!” he shouted, pulling on the helmet. “I’m going outside right now to show my pal, Stuart!”

Suddenly, from outside I heard, “Oh no!” Thud!

I looked out. He was sprawled on the sidewalk, embarrassed but not hurt.

“Better pick something else, Bradley,” I advised.

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76 thoughts on “THE COSTUME

  1. Very real story, Patricia, and I mean real beyond your own life. Our younger daughter bought and wore a gas mask one year. Never a dull moment, although I’m happy not to do Halloween now. I’d enjoy giving out treats much more if I could make something that’s tasty and good, rather than spending a fortune on candy.

    janet

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    • Thanks, Janet, for reading my story and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. I know what you mean. Until all that trouble years ago with homemade treats, it wasn’t that expensive for parents. My mother used to make popcorn balls.

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  2. Thanks, Al, for reading my story and commenting. That’s just what I was writing about. I’ve never tried one on, but I could imagine just what you said; a child would have a hard time seeing properly. Also, you’re right. It would make a great crash helmet. πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, Plaridel, for reading my story and commenting. He might have learned to be more careful but the fact was the helmet was too big for him and he couldn’t see properly so he stumbled and fell. Children don’t think of these things. They have to learn and sometimes those lessons are hard. The helmet probably protected his head though. πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, Dawn, for reading my story and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. This prompt reminded me of my son and his love of Halloween. The character in my story is like him. I think Halloween was his favorite holiday. He had such an imagination. πŸ™‚

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  3. My wife and I still enjoy going to costume parties. In fact, we have a huge crate of costumes and many of our friends come over to rummage through in the week prior to Halloween. One suggestion – I did stumble over the phrase, “he shouted with excitement” and caught myself thinking “how else would he shout?” Do we as readers need to be told he’s excited, or have we already concluded that from earlier in the story? I hope this makes sense.

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    • Thanks, HM, for reading my story and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. I was remembering our son when he was younger and how he loved Halloween. He’d get so excited. Every year it was a different costume. πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, JJ, for reading my story and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. I didn’t have the heart to see the little guy get hurt. I was thinking of my son when I wrote that story. He really loved Halloween. πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks, DCT, for reading my story and commenting. I’m glad you liked it. He did grow up. I was thinking of my son when I wrote this story and he just loved Halloween. Every year it was a different costume. πŸ™‚

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  4. Dear patriciaruthsusan, Great story! We have raised 4 sons now with children on their own and new stories to tell. Your story is awesome and fun! At least, he didn’t shout in pain, anger, sarcasm, – I like it a lot! Well done! Nan πŸ™‚

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  5. Thanks, Nan, for reading my story and commenting. I’m so glad you liked it. What a great family you have! I was remembering my son and his love of Halloween when I wrote that story. My daughter liked Halloween also but in a more subdued way. πŸ™‚

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  6. I absolutely adore this story. It brings the excitement of being a child at Halloween and the suspense of what might be the final costume decision! It also had a wonderful reality to it, as I can definitely imagine that the helmet would not be the easiest or most comfortable thing to wear! Though, some kids will go through the pain for the sake of a killer costume. I loved this!

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    • Thanks, Patrick, for reading my story and commenting. I’m really glad you liked it. XD I was remembering my son and his love of Halloween. He also suffered some of the falls of childhood but is grown now and non the worse for them. πŸ™‚

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