THE DISMAL FAILURE

 

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Copyright–Mary Shipman

Again it’s time for the new Friday Fictioneers’ weekly story challenge. This weekly challenge is to write a story with no more than 100 words. It’s to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt supplied for that week. The hostess for this challenge is the ever gracious and talented author Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. This week’s prompt is a summer rerun as Rochelle is on vacation. Enjoy your vacation Rochelle! It was first posted on May 1, 2012 and supplied by Mary Shipman. Thanks again Mary.

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/06/18/18-june-2014-summer-rerun/

Genre: Horror/Humor Fiction

100 Words

THE DISMAL FAILURE by P.S. Joshi

I came back. Too lazy to make a will, I died and my worthless nephew, Buster, got my money and house. Warned by the Higher Power not to seek revenge or I couldn’t move on, I didn’t listen. In this unfinished attic, I’ve planned that revenge.

Β I’ve been a dismal failure. Buster didn’t hear the many howls or the chains since he’s a sound sleeper. He was thrilled about the skate on the stairs since he thought he’d lost it. Multiple sightings didn’t bother him because he thought he’d hallucinated. Really sorry now, I’ve asked just to move on. Please.

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48 thoughts on “THE DISMAL FAILURE

  1. I really liked the combination of humor and seriousness in your story! Loved the “skate on the stairs” bit. Tightly packed in details. Alas, the poor ghost cannot move on!
    A question, though: Who is speaking at the end? That part could be differently interpreted. Not sure.

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    • Thanks Adelie. I’m sure now that he’s repented he’ll be able to move on. I thought I’d combine humor and horror and see what I came up with on this one. I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • Thanks Perry. Sorry if you thought that was about you. Actually, your stories are also pretty cool so you’re hardly a failure. You’re a pretty cool and smart guy. I think this ghost will get to move on. He’s changed his attitude and is sorry. I’m glad you liked the story. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • Thanks Karen. Yes, it is a story about revenge reversed. I just thought I’d try combining horror and humor this time and see what happened. It seems to have succeeded and I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  2. Aw, poor ghost, trying all the tricks and not getting anywhere. I hope the Higher Power relents and lets it move on.
    I particularly loved the skate on the stair – I can imagine the ghost looking gleefully on, waiting for disaster, only for the nephew to grin in triumph as he finds his lost skate πŸ™‚

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    • Thanks El. I guess their’s one in every group. πŸ˜€ This ghost wasn’t much of a success in life either. He never even got around to making a will so he can’t blame his nephew. Even his house was never finished. I’m glad you liked it. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • Thanks Russell. I don’t think he wants to be any type of ghost. He’s just worried he won’t move on. He wasn’t that great a person when he was alive and he’s being taught a hard lesson. Now that he’s sorry I think he’ll be allowed to move on. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • Thanks Alicia. I think he’ll be okay now that he’s sorry for his wrong attitude. I’m glad you liked the name I chose for the nephew. I thought it would be a good one for a hunorous story. I’m also happy you enjoyed the story. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  3. Very enjoyable story. I think I would be like the nephew and not notice the ghost (because I refuse to believe in them). I do believe that angels sometimes take the form of people and appear to help them.

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    • Thanks Zainab. I agree with you. I’d be extremely surprised if there were actually ghosts. I do believe in evil and don’t want to mess with anything like calling back spirits from the dead, spells and/or enchantments, etc.. I do believe in angels though and think they often help people. I believe many things exist we mortals can’t see. I sometimes write about imaginary things, or things from myths, if it makes a good story. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  4. Dear Patriciaruthsusan, Great ghost story and I feel sorry for the inept ghost! I hope he gets his act together and can move on up to the next station! Thanks, good job as usual! Nan πŸ™‚

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  5. You have a great sense of humour Susan, this was an enjoyable read as you turned the plot on it’s head. I was reminded of ‘The Canterville Ghost’ by Oscar Wilde where the family terrorises the ghost rather than being terrorised by him.

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  6. Thanks Subroto. I don’t know about the movie rights. I imagine it was made into a movie long past the expiration date of the copyright.The oldest film of it I saw was one from the 1940’s and I think they probably changed it a good bit so they could give screen time to the stars of the day. Oscar Wilde might very well have rolled over in his grave at those changes. Thanks for the web address of the original. I intend to look it up and read it. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  7. This is great, Susan. A ghost who is failing as a ghost. It’s funny that Buster thinks he’s just hallucinating. I like your end as well. A simple, Please. Time to move on. Great job!

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  8. I love how you’ve flipped the horror genre on its severed ear and onto humor. Way to go, Susan! I chuckled about that mischievous ghost who now just wants to move on. And “please” is priceless and so well-chosen.

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