UNCLE BARNEY’S VALUABLES

 

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Once again it’s time for us to show our creativity and write a new story for the Friday Fictioneers’ weekly challenge. This challenge is to write a story with no more than 100 words. It’s to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt supplied for that week. The gracious and talented hostess for this challenge is author and artist Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The prompt this week is a photo supplied by Adam Ickes. Thanks Adam.

Some weeks ago, I wrote a story about a couple of men, Dave and his grandson Will. They were visiting Dave’s college campus. Today’s story is about the same two fellows. If you want to read the first story, the link is the first one below:

https://patriciaruthsusan.wordpress.com/2014/05/30/the-campus-visit/

http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/07/16/18-july-2014/

Genre: Β Fiction/Human Interest

Word Count: 100 Words

Β UNCLE BARNEY’S VALUABLES By P.S. Joshi

Dave felt grateful. His Uncle Barney’s will was read and he’d inherited Barney’s attic contents.

“Will,” he said to his grandson, “Uncle Barney always said he’d leave me valuable things when he died.”

The two got the house keys from Barney’s daughter, who’d inherited the house, and drove to check the attic.

Opening the attic door, they discovered boxes of old files and a stuffed ram’s head. Dave’s heart sank. He whispered, “I thought he loved me.”

Will put his arms round Dave’s shoulders. “Grandpa,” he said gently, “don’t you see? These things were valuable to him.”

Dave finally smiled

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65 thoughts on “UNCLE BARNEY’S VALUABLES

    • Thanks Sandra. I was trying to show the love between the two and am happy I succeeded. I’m glad you liked the story. Some who read the other story involving those two seemed to like them so I brought them back. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  1. A mystifying truth within this wonderful story! Who knows why some people keep the things they do? I suppose it has something to do more so with the memories tied to the objects than the items themselves. Great work with evoking curiosity and wonder from your readers!

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    • Thanks Adelie.I think people keep things for a variety of reasons.What you say is true.Sometimes it’s tied to memories.That was probably why the uncle in my story kept those items.Sometimes it’s just because they can’t throw much of anything out.That’s psychological.Sometimes they hoard out of fear of being without something. It depends on the person.I’m glad you liked the story.Thank you for the encouragement. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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    • Thanks Ellespeth. They’re a good pair and complement each other. You’re right; that ram is going to go through a lot by the time we all use it in our stories. That may be why it’s trying to hide. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  2. Dear Susan,
    This one is my favorite for the week. You really nailed. The things we treasure, those who inherit will see as junk. It’s been that way since the beginning of time. Solomon even speaks of it in Ecclesiastes. Five stars from me.

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    • Thanks Russell. I really appreciate your high praise. I’ve got a Kindle now and I’m going to try to get to the bank and get my card activated so I can buy a copy of your book. I’ve had that card for ages, but never used it. I need it now to use the Kindle. Thanks again for the encouragement. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  3. Susan, you captured a small essence of human frailty, the inability to spot genuine treasures, when the grandson reminded his grandfather that Uncle Barney did leave him his real valuables. gold star story.

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  4. I still wouldn’t be thrilled to get the boxes of old files and the Ram’s Head instead of a couple cool million …. but what a great grandson/grandfather combination! You don’t see that kind of devotion among such disparate generations every day.and it’s great the way you portray it here!

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    • Thanks Wanda. I know what you mean. I’d have more stuff, but we’ve been through several moves and had to downsize a couple of times. We still have too much. I enjoyed your story. It was a fun piece and very different. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  5. Will has a good head on his shoulders. And who knows what they might find in those boxes? You paint a love relationship between Dave and Will.

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  6. hi Susan,
    I like the twist at the end – and how you showed all the love the grandson has for his grandpa in that little gesture. “Will put his arms round Dave’s shoulders. β€œGrandpa,” he said gently, β€œdon’t you see? These things were valuable to him.” ”
    For me the story is about love – itΒ΄s not always the big deal., we can find love often in seemingly worthless things or marginal doings.
    Liebe Grüße
    Carmen

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    • Thanks Carmen. You’re right; this story is about love. Will loves his grandfather very much and Dave’s uncle loved Dave. The uncle thought of the things he left as valuable and Dave finally understood that. I’m glad you liked the story. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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  7. This is a well written and simple post – that holds a *universal truth* and *life lesson* here — and I like the emotions and feeling I get when reading it; a gentle and quite reminder that expectations should be left by the roadside, and seeing the true value of things, as they are, is far more important.

    Well done Susan πŸ™‚

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  8. Thanks Ann. I think that will probably be the same with most of us. The things we consider valuable don’t always carry memories for those we leave behind. I’m glad you liked the story. πŸ™‚ —Susan

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