Copyright–Dawn Quyle Landau
Here we are once more taking a virtual trip to far places and strange venues with our guide, the gracious and talented author and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We’re sharing our original stories for the weekly trip of the Friday Fictioneers. Our challenge is to write a story with no more than 100 words. It’s supposed to include a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt supplied for the week. The prompt this week is supplied by Dawn Q. Landau. Thanks Dawn.
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2014/09/17/19-september-2014/
Genre: Humor Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words
THE LONG WALK By P.S. Joshi
John was a nice guy, but he had two big faults, telling tall tales and overeating.
His wife Marg had enough. One night she found him gorging at midnight. She came up behind him and said, “John.”
He jumped about a foot. “Would you believe–and it’s a fact–would you believe I had this strange dream where I was walking across a long, wide terrace? I walked and walked. I woke up to find myself sitting here eating in the kitchen.”
She shook her head, trying not to laugh. “No,” she said. “I don’t believe a word of it.”
Musings on Life & Experience 
Dear Susan,
You’re making me hungry. Good story. Would you believe I’m writing this in my sleep?
Aloha,
Doug
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i know somebody who gets up eats in his sleep. Great take.
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Hah, busted! I tell the same story every time. Funny story, enjoyed it a lot.
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I wonder did he have that story concocted?
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A very home-y little snippet from life, something that could be real. Enjoyed it. It reminds me of stories children tell when they’re caught doing something like this.
janet
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Good one, at least Marg saw the funny side even if she didn’t tell him that!
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A lovely and gentle story.
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They sound well matched. 🙂
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Ha, yes that’s a tall tale to tell – but at least it always lead to the right target.
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Har Har! Tall tales and food…. You wove them together perfectly.
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I love how some of your stories feel like I just dropped into a moment in someone’s life. This is one of those. It seems so real and simple, that it becomes more. Love that, Susan!
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Ha! The wife always knows. I love this minute of life. It says so much about them.
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I was laughing while thinking about this old comic strip I used to enjoy from the funny pages, way back when, involving a fellow named Dagwood Bumstead.
Thanks!
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Marg’s good-natured response confirms what we’ve already learned at the beginning: despite his failings, John is a nice guy and she appreciates him. Now if she found him downstairs with a woman and he said he had a dream where he woke up to find himself ……, it might be a whole other story!
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Marg has the patience of a saint, no?
Great read!
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Thanks J. Yes, she has a lot of patience. I’m very glad you liked the story. 🙂 —Susan
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Aw, bless him. Sleep-eating! Nice story.
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Dear Susan,
He could be a fantasy writer. I’d say he’ll have to do better than that. Good one.
shalom,
Rochelle
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He found a way to have just one problem lol 🙂 Nice
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That’s so cool. His tall tail might have even been true this time! Or not. Loved it!
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Ha I just realise I put tail instead of tale 🙂 I wonder if he’s growing one instead of a Pinnochio nose.
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Quickly spinning a tale like that has to at least be worth a sandwich.
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Thanks El Guapo. You may just be right.:D —Susan
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Good story Patricia. The dark side in me thought you might give the poor guy a heart attack and turn it into a tragedy, so its good that you left it humorous.
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Deliciously sweet…and funny. My kind of wifely tale…
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sounds perfectly plausible to me. All that walking made him hungry I’m sure.
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funny piece 🙂 i believe i’m also guilty of telling tall tales and of overeating .lol
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This prompt is bringing about all sorts of wonderful stories, yours included, Susan. I think what really happened here is he got the midnight munchies! But nice try, John. 🙂
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Good take, Susan! I can see him at the fridge.
Lily
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Dear Susan, Well, it’s like this, the refrigerator was calling me and woke me up from a good sleep and then when I went to tell it to leave me alone – there was no way to ignore the last piece of pie. I love the clever story for his alibi though! Great story! Nan 🙂
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God story, Susan. I’m afraid there’ll be no raiding my fridge. There’s nothing in it. I mean, I keep opening the door every five minutes and STILL, there’s nothing there.
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Good, I mean. Crap!
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I think sleep-eating seems like a very convenient problem to have. His “Would you believe…?” reminds me of the old Get Smart gag.
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Such a sweet and real moment. A perfect match:)
Ellespeth
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Thanks Ellespeth. I’m so glad you liked the story. 🙂 —Susan
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LOL. That story is hilarious and very neatly written.
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Thanks Sarah. I’m so glad you liked the story, and thanks for the encouragement. I had fun writing that one. 🙂 —Susan
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Hey, it could happen. After all, what isn’t in his mouth is all in his head.
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Thanks Alice. You have a good point. 🙂 —Susan
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I can’t help but identify with my namesake in your story. I also have a ‘John’ who, while he’s not into midnight fridge raids, does indulge the occasional eating binge given the right conditions. He’s also fond of taking advantage of my trusting nature with the wildest stories, which I, unlike your Marg, invariably believe. I like your story. It gives a funny and touching snapshot of a happy marriage. I also really like your title. Marriage is a long walk.
Marg (again)
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Thanks Marg. It’s such a coincidence that I chose those names and they match your husband’s and yours. I just pull names out of my imagination. I think many of us have indulged at one time or another in an eating binge. I know I have. My husband has a big imagination also. I’m so glad you liked the story. 🙂 —Susan
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“I did it in my sleep.” Scraping the barrel with that one! This could be a snatch of a scene from a comedy sitcom. Very visual. 🙂
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Thanks Ann. Yes, he had to come up with that one in a hurry. Thanks for the encouragement, and I’m very glad you liked the story. 🙂 —Susan
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