Jeep splashing in water.


This is my contribution this week to the challenge Monday’s Finish the Story hosted by Barbara Beacham. Every Monday, Barbara supplies a new picture prompt along with the first sentence to be used for the story. The original story to be written should have only 100 to 150 additional words. I’ve bolded the first senten given with the picture prompt. Be sure to click on the little blue frog in the blue box to read the other stories.

The link for all other stories is as follows:

Genre:  Realistic Humor Fiction

Word Count:  5+1+149=155


“They finally made their escape.”

As I wrote that, I dreamed of fame. Maybe I’d be a famous writer someday. I loved to write thriller stories.

The more people I literarily killed, the better. My favorite threat to someone who made me mad was to tell them one day I’d make them a villain in one of my books and shoot them full of holes.

Mom got hold of one of my stories one day and looked at me as though she’d never really seen me before.

“Laura,” she asked, slightly shocked, “how do you come up with this stuff? When I was fifteen I wanted to be a cheerleader and buy new clothes.”

She shook her head. “I just don’t know how a daughter of mine could be interested in killing.”

Just then the phone rang. She listened,  then shouted, “She said ‘that’ about me! I’ll kill her!”

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27 thoughts on “MURDEROUS

    • Thanks Ali. I think she’ll be okay. I worry more about the young kids who play violent vidio games before they’re mature enough to understand the difference between the gaming world and the real world. Of course the mother in my story could be a better example for her daughter. Unfortunately, she doesn’t seem to recognize she’s doing the wrong things. What a parent does has more impact than what they say. In making the nasty person a villain in a story you write was from a cartoon I saw. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • Thanks Penshift. Making someone you don’t like into a villain in your next novel seems to be a standing joke among writers. Hearing someone say they’ll “kill” a person who offends them is also a bit too common. 🙂 — Suzanne


      • Its part if classic character creation technique of basing them off real people. I like to think I don’t kill characters off because I have decent moral compass. But, really, its because I am afraid to give birth to homicidal maniac who’s scarier than Dexter. 🙂


      • Thanks Penshift. I watched a bit of Dexter and even that scared me. I’d never seen anything like that before. I know what you mean. I think what’s really scary is that the person can act perfectly normal and still be mentally way off base. I could write something like that also, but don’t know if I want to. Sometimes you almost have to kill off a character, but I’d like to think I’d do it for a good reason, to benefit the story, not just killing for killings sake.

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    • Thanks John. That “murder in the mind” part was from what seems to be a standing joke among writers as to how they make a person who annoys them into the villain in their next novel. Of course, “bloodlust” is not really a good thing on paper or in reality. Parent should of course be careful what kind of example they’re setting for their kids. — Suzanne


  1. An amusing story, Suzanne. I love the way you build it up – Mom’s total incomprehension of her daughter’s obsession with killing off her fictional characters to the hilarious last line. It’s funny, though, how many of us use that phrase in anger, ‘I’ll kill him / her!’


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