Old building next to a creek

Photo Copyright–Barbara W. Beacham

This is my contribution this week to the challenge, Monday’s Finish the Story hosted by Barbara Beacham. Every Monday, Barbara supplies a new picture prompt along with the first sentence to be used for the story. The original story to be written should have only 100 to 150 additional words. I’ve bolded the first sentence given with the picture prompt. Be sure to click on the little blue frog in the blue box to read the other stories.

The link for all other stories is as follows:


Genre: Humor Fiction

Word Count: 11+4+150=165 Words


Diamond Jack had his hideout next to the Rattle Snake River. It was an unpainted shack of a place. Inside it had only the barest furnishins: an old cook stove, a couple a beds, a table. and a couple chairs.

I been Jack’s partner for nigh on to forty years now. We’re both gettin’ up in age.

It’s been so long since we pulled a successful bank job, I think the law has forgotten about us.

I asked him just the other day, “Jack, ain’t we ever gonna pull another bank job and get some more cash?”

He said right back in my face, “You shut your trap, Tom. You’re eaten ain’t ya?”

What I didn’t know was Jack was holden’ out on me. His son was sendin’ him money just to keep him out of trouble. That doggone Jack is a proud one. He sure is that. He didn’t want nobody to know he was acceptin’ handouts from his boy.

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23 thoughts on “DIAMOND JACK AND ME

  1. I feel a bit sorry for these has-been bank robbers. Even the law has forgotten about them! I guess after their previous bank jobs they didn’t put any money aside for their old age πŸ™‚


    • Thanks, Ali. I doubt many robbers did put money aside. Probably a lot of them never reached old age, or expected to. These two did, but nothing was left. Good thing Jack’s son was around. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne


    • Thanks, Barb. I’m glad you liked the story. Jack was too cranky. No woman would put up with him. His wife left him years ago, and he’s only ever had the one friend since childhood. I’ll be looking forward to next week’s prompt. You come up with some good ones. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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      • Why thank you! I have 3 challenges with MFtS. The first is picking a photo; the second is coming up with an opening line; and the third is writing my own story! I am having a blast with this! Be well, and see you next week! Hugs!


    • Thanks, Kirizar. I just firgured bank robbers got old too, unless they were killed off while robbing. I thought it would be fun to write about two who did get old and how they were surviving. I’m glad you liked the story. I enjoyed writing it. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

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    • Thanks Hugmamma. My dad was an armchair cowboy, I saw a lot of westerns on TV as a child, and we went to see all the western movies, so I used those memories for this. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. I had fun writing it. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne


  2. Thanks, Joy. I’m glad you liked the story. My dad was an armchair cowboy and took Mom and me to see every western movie that came along. We also watched westerns on TV. I still enjoy them. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne


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