Copyright: Barbara W. Beacham
This is my weekly contribution to Monday’s Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. Every Monday, Barb supplies a new picture prompt along with the first sentence to be used for the story. The original story to be written should have only 100 to 150 additional words. The title doesn’t add to the word count. I’ve bolded the first sentence given with the picture prompt. Be sure to click on the little blue frog in the blue box to read the other stories.
The link for all the other stories is as follows:
http://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2015/02/16/mondays-finish-the-story-february-16th-2015/
Genre: Humor Fiction
Word Count: 150+21+2=171 Words
GRANDPA DISAPPEARED By P.S. Joshi
Little did they know when the photographer took their picture that they would find themselves in a painting. The small band left behind many friends and family members who wondered what happened.
The disappeared were Nathaniel Pitching who played the snare drum, Zechariah Knavelthorpe who played the tuba, Ely Twitchickle who played the air horn, and Humbert Thinkin who played the trumpet.
Buddy Pitching never got tired of hearing the story about the strange event. “Mom, tell me again how Grandpa just disappeared one day.”
“Well,” said his mother, “the band members decided to celebrate their ten years together by having a picture taken. They went to the studio and no one’s heard of them since. All that was found was the painting that’s hanging on the hallway wall. It’s an odd painting, because there are no brushstrokes.”
Buddy went and examined the painting again.
As he leaned closer, he thought he heard a tiny voice say, “Help.”
The figures seemed to have changed positions. That was creepy.
Wow! That was a very interesting interpretation of the picture and prompt. Great Job!
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Thanks, MG. I’m so glad you found the story interesting and enjoyed it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Cool take. The ‘Help’ ,, is a nice touch. 🙂
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m so glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Loved the little voice at the end, and what great names for the four! 🙂 Thank you Suzanne again, for joining in on the MFtS challenge! See you next week! Be well… ^..^
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Thanks, Barb, I’m so glad you liked the story, especially the little voice and the names. I’m looking forward to next week’s challenge. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I am looking forward to what you come up with! I love your writings! 🙂
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Thanks, Barbara. I’m so glad you like my writings. I enjoy what you write also. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thanks! 🙂
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🙂
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Very imaginative, interesting response Suzanne ~ I loved your names for the band ~ Lovely!
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Thanks, John. I so glad you liked the story, especially the names for the band. 🙂 — Suzanne
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This story fits with the prompt really well!
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Thanks, Emily. I’m so glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Oh no, they’re not only trapped but alive and aware as well 😦
Love the names you gave them!
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Thanks, Ali. Yes, they’re hoping someone rescues them. They’ve been watching. I’m glad you liked the names. Check out the “Dicken’s name generator.” http://www.namenerds.com/uucn/randdickens.html
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Hee. I got “Dick Posymede” 🙂
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Those are hilarious aren’t the Ali. 😀
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Loved it….that was real creepy!
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Thanks, Shivangi. I’m glad I got the desired effect and you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Oh, that’s terrific. “Help!” Love it!
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Thanks, Granonine. I’m so glad you liked the story, especially the “Help” near the end. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Great story. I love the addition of the ‘Help’. I hope eventually Buddy works out what happened and finds a way to release them. 🙂
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Thanks, Afairymind. I’m so glad you liked the story, especially the “Help” near the end. I’m sure Buddy will think of something. 🙂 — Suzanne
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OOOuuuu, I love this. The Twilight Zone kind of story. The ending was just brilliant!
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Thanks, Joy. I’m so gald I achieved the effects I wanted and you loved the story. I appreciate the encouragement. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Awesome! I like the clue that the painting has no brush strokes. That’s just chilling. And then the voice calling for help, that just gave me goosebumps. I love it!
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Thanks, Eric. I’m so glad you loved the story and I achieved the right effects. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Love this Suzanne, the dimensions are excellent, the voice and the movement. Very engaging, well done.
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Thanks, Michael. I’m so glad you liked the story. Thanks for the encouragement. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I thought your strongest line in the above story was this one: “Mom, tell me again how Grandpa just disappeared one day.”
If you reorganized the writing to end on that line, and maybe limit the detail of what happened, I think it would give the mystery more power. But, I did love all the names of the performers. Very clever that.
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Thanks, Kirizar. I’ll keep you advice in mind. I’m glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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