Doll parts

Copyright: Barbara W. Beacham

This is my weekly contribution to Monday’s Finish the Story, hosted byBarbara W. Beacham. Every Monday, Barbara supplies a new picture prompt along with the first sentence for the story. The original story to be written should have only 100 to 150 additional words. I’ve bolded the first sentence given with the picture prompt. Be sure to click on the little blue frog in the blue box, after clicking on the link, to read the other stories. The link for all the other stories is as follows:

Genre: Children’s Fiction

Word Count: 3+15+150=168 Words


After losing her head, she realized that the rest of her body was falling apart. It was a good thing she snapped together like pop pearls.

The baby pulled Debbie apart about twice a week. It was always the same. Meg, three, would forget her on the floor. Gloria, ten months, would find her.

“Dolly,” Gloria would shout.

First, off would come Debbie’s head (pop), then her arms (pop-pop) then her legs (pop-pop). It was always the same. Gloria would then crawl away from the scene of the naughty act.

Meg would come back and start shouting, “Mom-e-e-e!”

Mommy would come and on would go Debbie’s head (pop), then her arms (pop-pop), then her legs (pop-pop).

Mommy would tell Meg, “Don’t leave Debbie on the floor.”

Meg, tears running down her cheeks and dripping off her chin, would say, “Yes, Mommy.”

One day Mommy left a lovely set of wooden beads on a side table. Gloria found them.

“Ooh,” she said. She pulled extra hard.

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29 thoughts on “DEBBIE THE DOLL

    • Thanks, Diana. I remembered my daughter getting into my costume jewelry box when she was about three. She was having so much fun I just left her go. She’s always loved jewelry. I had to take out some chain knots though. I also remembered my daughter’s cat knocking over her guitar then running from the scene. 😀 — Suzanne

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  1. Gosh – do I remember those pop-beads. Mom had lots of them! Love your story Suzanne and how you wove this around young children and how they behave. Captured this perfectly! Thanks again for writing for the MFtS challenge! Stay tuned for next week’s challenge that will give your characters something to think about! Be well… ^..^


    • Thanks, Ellespeth. I think the baby feels the same way. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the story. By all means do try this one. It took me a while to think up a story for that picture and first sentence. 😀 — Suzanne


    • Thanks, John. I’m so glad you liked the story. Perhaps some day the baby will be a scientist who finds how other things come apart and go back together again. She has to work on that “back together again”. 😀 — Suzanne

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    • Thanks, Coastal Quill. Yes, Debbie is constantly “coming apart”. Mommy better be more careful where she puts her jewelry in future. I’m so glad you like my stories. 😀 — Suzanne


  2. Thanks, Rosanna. Actually, Debbie is used to it and is plastic, so it doesn’t hurt. It is inconvenient though. 😀 I’m so glad you enjoy these little stories. I had fun writing this one. 😀 — Suzanne


  3. I know I have been reading too many worst-case-scenario short stories. I was expecting a ‘mommy’s little serial killer action figure’ kind of ending. I think my brain has turned gruesome.


  4. Thanks, Kirizar. I can’t blame you since many writers favor writing those t;ypes of stories. If that’s their thing, more power to them. I tend to love humor and gentle stories. I have written some horror flash stories, but I don’t like to include child killers. I have more than my fill seeing stories in the papers. Gloria just needs her desire to pull things apart guided to more useful acts. She’s more curious than anything else, and that’s a good thing. Perhaps she’ll be a scientist some day. Of course, she might just like to tease her sister also. That’s just early sibling rivalry. 😀


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