Photo Copyright: The Reclining Gentleman
Here we are again. This week we’re in a virtual restaurant near a virtual interstate highway. Our hostess for this gathering is the gracious and talented writer and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Our group is the Friday Fictioneers. The challenge for each of us is to write a story with no more than 100 words. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt provided for the week. This week’s prompt was provided by The Reclining Gentleman. Thanks, RG.
To read the other stories from group members, just click on the little blue frog in the blue box, after clicking on the link. The link for the other stories this week is as follows:
http://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2015/09/23/25-september-2015/
Genre: Realistic Fiction
Word Count: 99 Words
ANGEL AHEAD? by P.S. Joshi
“I wish now I’d started home earlier. Rain’s beating down, and the moon’s hidden.
“Luckily, traffic’s light. The idiot behind me has his high beams on.
“All at once a man’s appearing far ahead, standing in my lane. I slam the breaks on, sliding into the other lane.
“I finally come to a stop. Mr. High Beams behind me has disappeared.
“Climbing out, I walk back down the highway. Shining my flashlight, I see in horror the highway has washed away. Mr. High Beams lies far below, lights still on.
“The other man has disappeared, but where to?”
Too bizarre to contemplate an answer with impunity.
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Thanks, Mick. And yet, bizarre things similar to that have been reported. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Spooky! Nicely done.
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Thanks, LIF. I’m so pleased you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Spooky indeed. Maybe if he had turned down the light…
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Thanks, Gah. I’m so glad you liked the story. Yes, it’s very annoying to have a car right behind you with their high beams on. —- Suzanne
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At least with his beams still on his body will be easy to find 🙂
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Thanks, Ali. Although it’s improbable, I suppose he could still be alive if his seat belt was on. —- Suzanne
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Wierd! I thought it might end with ‘and then he woke up’!
Rosey Pinkerton’s blog
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Thanks, Rosey. I guess I wouldn’t end a story that way because I’ve read some advice against that kind of ending. Readers, we are told, don’t like that kind of ending. I know it’s still done. I also resisted beginning with, “It was a dark and stormy night.” 😀 — Suzanne
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“All at once a man’s appeared far ahead”, (seems like something was lost in editing here)
This is creepy in the timing. There but for the grace of God sort of thing. Well done.
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Thanks, Alicia, and thanks also for telling me about the typo. I’ve fixed it. I did do some editing on that piece to put it in the character’s words. I reread it a couple of times and still missed that typo. 😦 I’m so pleased you liked the story, and I got the right affect. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne,
Alicia took what I was going to say about “a man’s” Seems typo-ish to me.
And as Dickey Lee sang so long ago in the song, “Laurie”, “Strange things happen in this world.”
Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Thanks for telling me about the typo. I told Alicia, I read that story over a couple of times and “still” missed that typo. There have been strange sightings of that type reported in the past. I left it open to the reader’s interpretation. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I love angel stories. Well done. Very interesting and I read about many sitings of this sort. 🙂
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Thanks, Susan. I love angel stories also, and have also read of many sightings of that type. I’m so pleased you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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This driver is very fortunate – shame about Mr High Beam behind her. I guess her time isn’t up yet. An interesting idea, and a nice description of the night.
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Thanks, Margaret. I’m pleased you liked the story and found it interesting. Yes, any driver who avoids such an accident is fortunate. It’s so annoying when drivers are right behind you with high beams on. Sometimes I think they forget they’re on. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Perhaps, Karma at play too. Eeerie night creating a sinister event.
Interesting take on the photo prompt.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks, MOI. I’m leaving the sighting open to interpretaion. There have been such events reported. I’m pleased you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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perhaps the other man is just an illusion. on a rainy night, one’s imagination can go wild. 🙂
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Thanks, Plaridel. There have been many sightings of that type, but I’m leaving the story open to interpretation. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Spookily serendipitous! (If there is such a thing.) Nicely done Suzanne.
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Thanks, Sandra. I’m happy you liked the story. If there isn’t such a word as “serendipitous,” there should be. It’s a great word. 😀 — Suzanne
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Intriguing story, so many questions left unanswered. Loved it. 🙂
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Thanks, Lore. I’ve read of such sightings, so I thought I’d leave the ending open for interpretation by the reader.I’m so pleased you loved the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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A lovely take. Somehow the belief in personal destiny is fast disappearing OR it is just not in fashion anymore. Great read. 🙂
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I personally think there has to be something more after this life; we expect more because there is more. I know it may not be fasionable to think that way, but I never felt any special desire to be fashionalbe. 🙂 — Suzanne
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So true. Without a sense of personal destiny ……. all of it seems so futile. 🙂
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Oh.. somehow I think that the high-beams of the world should end up in a place where angels never come.. good thing she was saved.
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Thanks, Bjorn. I’m sure high beams behind other drivers have caused many accidents. It’s so disgusting to have them right behind you. I’m so pleased you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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A spooky tale indeed. Great take on the picture.
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Thanks, Francesca. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I’m glad I managed the desired effect. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Ooh, eerie and mysterious, Suzanne. Sometimes, we do have to chalk up experiences to divine intervention. Well done. Very original story.
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Thanks, Amy. I’ve heard of such sightings, and I believe in angels. I left it open to interpretation though. I’m so pleased you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Wow, Suzanne. Intense story. I think those things really happen. Great job. (I’m not sure how I missed this one. Glad I caught up.) 🙂
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Thanks, Diana. I think those things really happen also. There have been a number of reports of sightings like that. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I tried out a 1st person POV in that story, and it seemed to work well. 🙂 — Suzanne
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The first person pov is really fun to write. It worked perfectly.
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Nicely done. It would be interesting to encounter an angel…but that again maybe we have and haven’t recognized them.
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Thanks, Ansumani. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I’ve read that it’s possible angels have helped people but we don’t recognize they’re angels. In the Old Testament they appeared as young men. 🙂 — Suzanne
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It is so annoying when people tailgate with high beams on. 🙂 That was really good. I like the intervention from the mysterious stranger that prevents disaster.
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Thanks, Deborah. Yes, it’s extremely annoying when someone behind you has their high beams on. I’m so glad you liked the story. I left it for the reader to decide about the mysterious stranger. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Did an angel just kill a guy for blinding another driver with his high beams?
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Thanks, Dawn. The angel didn’t kill the driver with his high beams on. That driver was in the accident because he was driving too fast to save himself. He was reckless. I also never said he died. He might have survived if he had his seat belt on. —- Suzanne
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Fine ghostly tale, remind me never to put my high beam on.
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Thanks, Subroto. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Putting a high beam on is okay as long as you’re not directly in back of another driver. I also never liked tailgaters. The two things together can cause a serious accident. —- Suzanne
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Seems like the right guy got what he was asking for! I feel those high beams coming up behind me!
Lily
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Thanks, Lily. Those high beams in a rear view mirror are the worst. Tailgating is another thing I hate. It might have proved fatal in that story. —- Suzanne
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Great story Suzanne. One time that a high beamer behind is a joy rather than a hindrance. Seems like he got his just deserts but the poor man…. must have gone down too.
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Thanks, Irene. I’m so pleased you liked the story. He might have survived if he had his seat belt on. It was probably the tailgating rather than the high beam that caused the trouble for him. —- Suzanne
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When I had a glare cataract, I had to give up night driving for a while until after my op. Non-dipped headlights really dazzled me and left me blind, whether they belonged to approaching cars, or ones close behind me.
Well-written, Suzanne. An extreme solution to rid the road of a menace, but then supernatural entities can probably see the big picture and know how many lives they’re saving. On the other hand, maybe the entity was malign and coming to claim somebody whom they thought would fit in wherever bad people go in the next life!
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Thanks, Sarah. I’m so glad your eyes are better since your operation. I’ve had those people with high beams on behind me at night and I know what you mean. They are either unaware or just nasty. I don’t know exactly what the entity was. I prefer to think it was friendly. The car behind with the high beams was also tailgating and that’s dangerous, so he probably had no one to blame but himself. If he’d been the proper length behind he might have excaped the wash out on the road. If I saw someone quickly change lanes at night, I’d probably do the same because I’d suspect there was trouble ahead. —- Suzanne
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