Photo Copyright: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Here we are together for another week. Our hostess is the gracious and talented artist and author, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Today we’re gathered in her lovely kitchen. We are the Friday Fictioneers, and the challenge this week, and every week is for each of us to write an original story with no more than 100 words. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt provided for the week. This week’s prompt was provided by Rochelle herself. Thanks again, Rochelle.
To read the other stories from group members, just click on the link below, then on the little blue frog in the blue box. The link for the other stories this week is as follows:
https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2015/12/16/18-december-2015/
Genre: Speculative Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words
ALWAYS TOGETHER By P.S. Joshi
The kitchen is the only room in the house without curtains. I’m all alone since John drowned.
I eat dinner early because the house has been surrounded by fog after dark. Something lurks there.
I hear waves impacting the sea wall. Nearer there’s a low moan.
I loved John, but I didn’t want him to come back to haunt me. He said we’d always be together, but, John, not like this. Please no, John.
The moaning isn’t the worst. There’s the scratching on the door.
This is not the man I knew and loved. Now he’s a monster.
We would always be together …….
The most benign of words can have sinister connotations. Great take.
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I’m sure no one would want to be together if it meant a haunting. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Now that is seriously frightening… Well done Suzanne.
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Thanks, Sandra, for the high praise. I’m so glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Scary biscuits, Suzanne.
Reminiscent of The Monkey’s Paw.
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Thanks, C.E. I appreciate the praise in likening my work to a professional writer’s. This one even scares me a bit when I read it back. I haven’t read the Monkey’s Paw. If I can get up the courage, I’ll see if I can find it to read. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I’ll chime in also that “always together” takes on such a sinister tone in this story — scary!
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Thanks, Joy. I’m so glad I achieved the effect I was trying for. I almost scared myself. 😀 — Suzanne
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Oh wow, that was really creepy. Maybe my favorite story for this prompt. I still have chills from reading that. Great job, Suzanne. You knocked it out of the park with this one.
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Thanks, Voice. What great praise. I’m really pleased you liked it so much. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Creepy. Hopefully it’s just her imagination…
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Thanks, Ali. If it is, she’s got a wild imagination. Looks like I do too. I’m so glad you liked it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Creepy, Suzanne. Beware when someone promises to be together forever!
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Thanks, Diana. I’m so pleased I succeeded in making it creepy. I almost scared myself in fact. 🙂 If I hear those words in future, I’m going to think of this story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Ooh, does this mean people can change once they are dead. Doesn’t bear thinking about.
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Thanks, Patrick. Kind of like zombies isn’t it. I don’t like to think of them either. This is, of course, my big imagination. I don’t think they actually do. At least, I hope not. 🙂 — Suzanne
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this is real creepy. maybe a ghost buster can help?
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Thanks, Plaridel. That’s a thought. I’ll suggest it to her. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne,
Sinister, menacing and downright creepy. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Even I don’t like reading it at night. Shalom to you also. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Gosh, Suzanne. Makes one think twice about…marital bliss. This goes a little further than I would want. hugs…
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Thanks, Hugmamma. It goes a little further than I’d want also. I watched some of “The Walking Dead” because a friend of my daughters acts in it (the Korean actor), but I had to stop because it started to bother me. My daughter said it gave her nightmares. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Really scary story – but sometimes , some Johns change to mosters even without drowning 😦
Nicely written- I like the way you build up the tension and tie to John drowning at the end.
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Thanks, Ansumani. You’re right, some men do act like monsters while still alive. I’m so pleased I succeeded in making it scary and you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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John needs to get an afterlife. Surely, there’s something more productive he can do than haunt his widow.
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Thanks, Russell. He does need to get a handle on living in the afterlife. He’s not only a monster but a bore, which is worse. 😀 — Suzanne
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Oh my – that’s no way to end a loving relationship. Poor dear!
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Thanks, Erin. John needs to “get his act together”. If she gave him a good talking to he’d probably stop haunting her. Maybe he dominated her in life also. 😀 — Suzanne
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No wonder she’s nervous alone in the house. Creepy story.
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Thanks, Margaret. I know I’d be scared to death. I’m so glad you liked the story. I almost scared myself rereading it. 😀 — Suzanne
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Ah… The scratching… I really wonder if it can be even worse. I think it’s time to invest in garlic…
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Thanks, Bjorn. You might be right. As with all vampires, she better not invite him in. I didn’t consider vampires, but he might have been bitten before he drowned and he didn’t actually drown. Anything’s possible. 😀 — Suzanne
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This isn’t going to end well, is it?
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Thanks, Liz. We can hope, but it doesn’t sound good does it. — Suzanne
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Oh, how frightful. The scratching at the door got me. Whatever can she do? I hope she can escape the monster. Suzanne. Well done!
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Thanks, Amy. I’m so glad I succeeded in making it frightening and you enjoyed it. If it was me, I’d wait until daylight and leave as the family in the movie “Poltergeist” did. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Really creepy this week, Suzanne! You really got the flow here, and as a reader you feel the tension build. Nice job!
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Thanks, Dawn. I’m so glad I got the effect I wanted and you liked the story so much. That’s high praise and I appreciate it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I’ve had those feelings and heard those noises, too Suzanne! Good job. Merry Christmas!
Lily
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Thanks, Lily. When you’re alone, your imagination can run wild. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Merry Christmas also to you and yours. 🙂 — Suzanne
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