THE MEMORY

 

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Here we all are for another week. Today we’re standing on the virtual porch of an old Victorian house. There’s a beautiful virtual frosted window in the door. Our hostess for this weekly gathering is the talented and gracious author and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We’re the Friday Fictioneers group. Our challenge this week and every week is to write an original story with no more than 100 words not including the title. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt for the week. This week’s prompt was requested by Kent Colby and supplied by Rochelle herself. Thanks, Kent, and Rochelle.

To read the other stories by the group members, just click on the link given below, then on the little blue frog in the blue box.

The link for this week’s stories is as follows:

https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/06/29/1-july-2016/

Genre: Realistic Fiction

Word Count: 100 Words

THE MEMORY by P.S. Joshi

Many nights 10-year-old Maggie Wright had a recurring dream. She saw a frosted window in a Victorian door. she had no idea where the house was.

There were holes in her memory. She’d gone to live with her grandmother in Boston when she was three years old and couldn’t remember her parents.

She’d told her grandmother about the dream but the old woman just said, “Some things are better left alone.”

One night she opened the door in her dream. On the floor were the bodies of a man and woman. They’d been shot. Then she remembered.

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56 thoughts on “THE MEMORY

    • Thanks, Neil. I’m pleased you enjoyed the story, especially the line about “the holes in her memory”. Actually, the reveal isn’t exactly explicit as it doesn’t reveal “who” did the shooting. I appreciate your advice, though. If I lengthen the story in future, I’ll think about it. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • Thanks, IB. I’m pleased you enjoyed the story. Yes, it would have been better if the memory hadn’t come back, especially while she was still a child. I’ll be sure to stop by and read your story. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • Thanks, Margaret. Yes, it was sad. I am considering turning it into a longer short story between 3,000 to 7,000 words,at some time in the near future. I’ve read the author Patterson is starting work on “novelettes” which would be about 7,000 to 20,000 words in length. They would be sold in places like checkout counters in various stores like the old pulp fiction magazines were. I think that’s a brilliant idea. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • Thanks, Russell. I am considering doing that. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I’m working on lengthening stories to between 3,000 to 7,000 words. If a writer wants to sell a story, I read about 4,000 words is a common, acceptable length. You might be interested to read what I commented to Margaret about the project the author Patterson is working on. 🙂 — Suzanne

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      • I’m working on a story that will end up somewhere between 20 & 25,000 words. People in this day and age have short attention spans and do tend to migrate toward stories they can read quickly.

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      • I’ve read information similar to that Russell. We all know people would flock to whatever Patterson wrote so he’s probably not a perfect example. All the best with your novella. People love humor. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  1. That’s one big horrible memory and probably best left unremembered. Nicely told. The ending was essential for me to convey the brutality of the memory that lurks within her mind.

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    • Thanks, Rochelle. I agree. It would be like opening an infected wound to clean it so it can heal. Hopefully, the grandma will get her professional help and they can both heal. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne

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  2. A touch of the profound, Suzanne. Nicely done. Yes, when we’ve managed to “un-remember” something, it’s best left alone. LOL, I used to say that I would wish for amnesia, except for the fact that I’d likely drive myself to distraction trying to remember what I had wanted to forget! 😀 Huge hugs.

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    • Thanks, Teagan. I know what you mean. It would bother me also if something was stuck somewhere in my memory and I couldn’t remember what it was. It would be irritating. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Huge hugs back to you. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  3. Great story which ends with a bang (sorry, couldn’t resist the pun)! I like how you handled the repressed childhood memories, which is reminiscent of Rochelle’s character’s suppressed memories about another terrible event.
    Well-done!

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  4. Right out of Hitchcock (or could be). Great story, Suzanne. I, too, think that memories that keep haunting you do you less good than remembering and working through it. Otherwise, you’d feel something from your life missing, as horrible as it could be.

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  5. I can see why she suppressed this memory for as long as she could. The frosty window has an eerie effect and works very well for your story. I got a chill reading it. Nice one, Suzanne.

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