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Here we are for another week. Today we’ve gathered near a virtual alley in a virtual city. Our hostess for this weekly gathering is the talented and gracious author and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We’re the Friday Fictioneers group. Our challenge this week and every week is to write an original story with no more than 100 words not including the title. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt for the week. This week’s prompt is another repeat requested by Sandra Crook and supplied by Jan Marler Morrill. Thanks, Sandra, and Jan.
To read the other stories by the group members, just click on the link given below, then on the little blue frog in the blue box.
The link for this week’s stories is as follows:
https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/07/06/8-july-2016/
Genre: Realistic Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words
THE ALLEY by P.S. Joshi
Doris’s husband was in his late seventies, ten years older than her. She worried about him. He insisted on taking a shortcut through an alley in the city and wouldn’t listen.
She was afraid she’d get a call from the police some night telling her his body had been found in that alley with his wallet gone. Even a friend had warned him.
One night she got a call from the police.
“Mrs. Moore, we found…”
Here it comes, she thought. I don’t want to hear.
“…your husband’s wallet in an alley. He must have dropped it.”
Phew! Nice build-up of tension 🙂
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Thanks, Ali. I’m so pleased you liked the story, the way I built up the tension. It was based partly on fact. My husband used to cut down an alley. I worried, but nothing happened to him. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Phew! Funny story, Suzanne. Love the ending. Instead of getting robbed and murdered, his wallet gets returned to him. Can’t tell you how may times that’s happened to my husband 🙂
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Thanks, Diana. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I’m glad your husband got his wallet back. My husband used to carry his ATM card in a special inside pocket in his trousers. I saw one day that he thought he was putting the card there and instead he missed the pocket and the card traveled the length of his pant leg to the ground. Good thing I was standing there and saw it happen. He missed the inside of the bag he carried his umbrella in but I wasn’t there and he lost it. The umbrella must have fallen on the ground. Someone gained one. He used to walk down an alley but nothing happened to him. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Funny, Suzanne. Good thing you saw the ATM card! My huband frequently drives off with things on the top of his car too 😀
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I guess in the end there are more honest people than dishonest ones… great build of tension.
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Thanks, Bjorn. I’m pleased you liked the story. I worried about my husband and that alley, but nothing happened to him. Yes, there are honest people. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I lost my wallet once. When I got it back the cash had been drained, but at least I got my driver’s license and social security card back. I didn’t have any credit cards in those days.
And–you don’t have to be old to get mugged.
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Thanks, Russell. I lost a wallet once also. The cash was missing when I got it back, but I also got back pictures and all my cards including credit cards. It was probably kids who just wanted quick money. I know you don’t have to be old to get mugged, but it makes it easier. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Wonderful story about marital “conflict” – not much – with a happy ending.
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Thanks, Alicia. I’m pleased you liked the story. It’s based on truth, but no one tried to rob my husband. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Phew! You had me worried 😀
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Thanks, Dahlia. I’m pleased you liked the story and I created good tension. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Her relief was tangible. Nicely done, Suzanne.
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Thanks, Sandra. I’m pleased you liked the story, that I got the relief to sound real. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank God for that ending.
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Thanks, CAH. I’m pleased you liked the story, especially the ending. 🙂 — Suzanne
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LOL. Isn’t that just like a man. Delightful, Suzanne. TGIF! Mega hugs.
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Thanks, Teagan. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Nothing happened to my husband in that alley, but I used to warn him so this was based on fact. Mega hugs to you also. 😀 — Suzanne
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Heh, you’re having me laugh with relief. Great story, suspenseful but sweet.
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Thanks, Gah. I’m happy you enjoyed the story so much. I’m also glad I achieved good tension in it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Us men what are we like, a well told event. And you had me smiling, great. Mike
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Thanks, Michael. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story and it made you smile. 😀 — Suzanne
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There are some good alleys in the world. Nicely crafted.
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m so pleased you liked the story. Yes, I guess there are some good alleys. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Oh that’s so funny. He was twice lucky – he didn’t get mugged and his lost wallet was returned. He couldn’t have been safer. Nice picture of a likeable and realistic couple.
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Thanks, Margaret. I’m happy you enjoyed the story and I made the characters realistic. It was based on reality, but my husband never had a problem in that alley. I still used to warn him, though. It wasn’t safe. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne,
Wonderful build of tension to a huge sigh of relief. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the story, the way I built the tension. 🙂 — Suzanne
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A neat twist that rings all too true – my own husband is elderly and forgetful!
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Thanks, Liz. I’m so pleased you liked the story and it rang true. My husband was and is forgetful. The story was based on fact although my husband never had trouble in that alley. I used to warn his as it wasn’t really safe. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Great twist at the end.
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Thanks, Connie. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the story, especially the twist at the end. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Lovely ending of a nicely told story.
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Thanks, Ottilliah. I’m so pleased you liked the story, especially the ending. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Nice tension in this story, and a relieved happy ending. Our thoughts went along fairly similar lines this week!
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Thanks, RC. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the story, especially the tension and happy ending. I’ll drop over and read your story. I got way behind in my reading this week. 🙂 — Suzanne
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And we all just breathed a big sigh of relief!
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Thanks, Dawn. I’m pleased you enjoyed the story, and I achieved good tension with it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Really great build-up, Suzanne. It sells the story. The ending really rounds it out, too. I laughed out loud.
Neat! 🙂
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Thanks, Kent. I’m so happy you enjoyed the story. Thanks also for complimenting how I wrote it. It was based on truth, but my husband never lost his wallet in that alley. I used to warn him about going down through it, though. 😀 — Suzanne
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Hahahaha! Real-life sure helps our writing, doesn’t it? 😀
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Phew! Thank God for mercies! You rescued me, Suzanne!
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Thanks, Sabina. You’re welcome. I’m happy you liked the story and I achieved good tension in it. 😀 — Suzanne
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Whew! Close call there. Funny thing. My husband just lost his wallet. I would love it if someone called to tell me where it is, Suzanne. 🙂 Great story.
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