Photo Copyright: Vijaya Sundaram
Here we are for another week. Today we’re watching fireworks in the night sky. Our hostess for this weekly gathering is the talented and gracious author and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We’re the Friday Fictioneers group. Our challenge this week and every week is to write an original story with no more than 100 words not including the title. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt for the week. This week’s prompt was provided by Vijaya Sundaram. Thanks, Vijaya.
To read the other stories by the group members, just click on the link given below, then on the little blue frog in the blue box.
The link for this week’s stories is as follows:
https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2016/08/31/2-september-2016/
Genre: Realistic Fiction
Word Count: 100 words
A NARROW ESCAPE by P.S. Joshi
Maggie had decided to go to work for her father-in-law at his novelty factory. The work wasn’t hard, and the pay wasn’t that bad. Besides, being the boss’s daughter-in-law, she doubted she’d be fired.
After starting work, she began to notice disturbing things. Several of the other employees were missing at least one finger. Also, she developed a cough.
When she’d worked there several months, she was aware of a gradual turnover rate of workers. She finally worried so much she turned in her notice.
Two months later there was a chemical explosion and fire that gutted the place.
I’m guessing she set the fire.
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Thanks, Neil. I wasn’t thinking of her as the arsonist, but it would make an interesting story. I’m pleased you liked it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I had hoped she would call Health & Safety to report the factory! Great take on the prompt.
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Thanks, Iain. She probably didn’t because it was a relative. She wasn’t sure what was happening as she knew little of chemicals. She also was not even a high school graduate and didn’t know what resources were available to help people in the workplace. No one advised her. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Good job she was paying attention! Shame no-one reported the place in time to save it.
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Thanks, Ali. Yes, it was a shame no one reported it. People are scared of losing their jobs. People who take those jobs really need the work. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Yes, I rather assumed that she’d set the fire. But she’s better off out of there. Nicely done.
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Thanks, Sandra. I didn’t see her as setting the fire because she was more a victim than an arsonist. It was also the business of her husband’s father, a family business. I saw it as a tragic accident because of all the chemicals involved, an explosion. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Good thing she got out of there – that doesn’t always happen in real life. Great take on the prompt!
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Thanks, Diana. You’re right. It often ends badly. I’m pleased you liked the story, my take on the prompt. —- Suzanne
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Glad she was smart enough to notice. I hope the fire happened when the factory was empty.
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Thanks, Liz. Even though she needed the job, she just couldn’t take the dangers of it. There had been other accidents with the chemicals as some people had injuries. Chances are unless the owner set the fire for the insurance there was another accident so someone probably got injured. Most workers probably got out before fire swept the place. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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I take it that the place was cursed and the father-in-law was Satan, or some such. Or maybe it was just a badly run company and I was the CEO. Could have been either.
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Thanks, Perry. It sounds like it was cursed, doesn’t it? There are places like that, though. They just seem like hell to the workers. I ‘m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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This felt like a small time factory in Asia, or then again it might have been a Victorian match factory in England ! For me this was a good take on the photo prompt. Mike
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Thanks, Mike. I actually got the idea from the place an older cousin of mine worked in the U.S. in the late 50’s. There are some terrible places in India also. You can find them many places I guess if you look hard enough. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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there are many factories like that
http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2016/09/victory-march-they-had-won-greatvictory.html
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Thanks, I.B. I don’t doubt it. They often hire undocumented aliens in the U.S. The bosses know they won’t complain as they’re afraid of being deported. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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I agree with Michael and IBA. No dearth of death-trap factories in world and they manufacture for the worlds leading brands. Good take.
http://www.huffingtonpost.in/entry/walmart-bangladesh_n_3201358
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I read the link you included. It’s a shame, but customers are going to continue to buy those goods from discount stores like Walmart as long as they get them cheap. Pressure will have to be brought on those discount stores owners from an outside source. In the U.S. many of them hire undocumented aliens who they know won’t report them for fear of being deported. It’s a vicious circle. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Glad you read the story.
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She was lucky, but I don’t see much of a future for her marriage with such relatives. A sad reality that such factories still exist. Good story, Suzanne.
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Thanks, Gabriele. You’re right. I got the idea from what an older cousin of mine went through in the late 50’s. She led a hard life and that marriage didn’t work out. The poor woman later died of cancer, and I’ve often wondered if working with those chemicals had anything to do with it. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne,
Perhaps, as the boss’s DIL, she might have escaped missing fingers and chronic coughs. At any rate, Maggie was wise to follow her intuition. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I got the idea from what an older cousin of mine went through in the late 50’s. She didn’t lose a finger, but years later died of cancer. I’ve wondered if the chemicals had anything to do with it. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Your story went in a direction I didn’t expect (which I always enjoy!). Nice work Suzanne. Plus, a good reminder that when something just isn’t right, listen to your intuition! 😀 Mega hugs.
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Thanks, Teagan. You’re right. Follow your suspicions. I’m pleased you liked the story so much. Mega hugs to you also. 🙂 — Suzanne
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So lucky she got out and was brave enough to leave. An abusive work place never gets better in my experience. Well told and nicely written.
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Thanks, Amy. Yes, she was lucky. You’re right as those terrible workplaces usually don’t improve. I’m pleased you liked the story so much, the way I wrote it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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What a terrifically told story, Suzanne. I like the narrative and the direction it went. As for the daughter in-law, she got out fast. Very fastidious writing. Super-duper!
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Thanks, Kent for the great comment. Yes, the woman did finally leave as she became really worried. I’m pleased you liked the story so much. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I wonder if the marriage was as doomed as the work… with such a father, the son had to be problematic too… the workers disappearing was especially chilling.
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Thanks, Bjorn. I got the idea from what an older cousin of mine went through. She led a hard life. That marriage didn’t work out as the son she was married to caused her a lot of problems. I think many people just quit like she did. I’m pleased you liked the story. —- Suzanne
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Wow! She quit just in time! Wish she’d had a chance to say something about it, though. Good story, Suzanne!
(Sorry for my late response to your story!)
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Thanks, Vijaya. Yes, she quit in time. Don’t worry about being late. I’m pleased you liked it. I know we all have lives to lead. 🙂 — Suzanne
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