Photo Copyright: Sandra Crook
Here we are this week sitting together near a large columned building. We’ve gathered to discuss our original stories for the week. This is the Friday Fictioneers group. Our hostess for the gathering is the talented and gracious author and artist, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The challenge for each of us this week and every week is to write a story with no more than 100 words, not counting the title. It’s supposed to have a beginning, middle, end, and follow the picture prompt for the week. This week’s prompt was provided by Sandra Crook. Thanks, Sandra.
To read the other stories by group members, just click on the link given below, then on the little blue frog in the blue box.
The link for this week’s stories is as follows:
https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2017/05/03/5-may-2017/
Genre: Speculative Fiction
Word Count: 100 Words
SAFETY IN NUMBERS by P.S. Joshi
Chand and fifty other Section Ten patrollers stared at the huge crumbling building, its walkway partly covered with pieces of broken masonry.
He thought it must be over two hundred years since the Greatest War. Who could keep count?
Soon they’d have to find a place to spend the night safe from mutants who preyed on wild animals, any lone human they found, or even their own wounded or dying.
Hardened patrollers parked their trucks on cleared parts of the walkway and set up a guard.
Howling started. It wasn’t wild animals. Ravenous, drooling mutants crept from deep caves.
A tale of starvation of so many kinds. Intriguing
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Thanks, Philosopher. I’m glad you liked the story and found it intriguing. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne,
This put me in mind of the Mad Maxx series. Horrifying and depressingly well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks, Rochelle. I’m just glad I won’t be around to see it. I’m pleased you thought it was well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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A great leap from the prompt to a dystopian future. Well done.
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Thanks, Iain. I’m glad you liked the story. I just wanted to write something different. I guess I succeeded. 🙂 — Suzanne
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You certainly have scope, Patricia — a testament to a well-oiled sense of creativity.
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Thanks again, Erik. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Yes, this was definitely different and very well written.
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Thanks, Neel. I’m pleased you liked the story and thought it was well written. Dystopian is a different genre for me but I like to experiment. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Oh, how scary. You set the scene very well.
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Thanks, Granonine. I’m pleased I accomplished the scariness I was trying for and you enjoyed the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Oh yes… we need to keep together against the mutants.
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Thanks, Bjorn. I’m pleased you liked the story. Yes, those mutants are nasty so all humans need to stick together. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I hope they’ve got all the angles covered. Great story!
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Thanks, Ali. So do they or they could be eaten. I’m pleased you enjoyed the story. I know you like weird creatures. 😀 — Suzanne
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Well done. I’m well and truly unnerved now.
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Thanks, Sandra. I’m pleased you liked the story. Sorry I did that to your lovely French building. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Weird. Good, but weird.
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Thanks, Jelli. I’m pleased you liked the story. I agree it was weird. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Well crafted. Truly chilling.
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m glad you liked it. Thanks for the nice comment. 🙂 — Suzanne
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This is the type of genre I enjoy reading, and I enjoyed this offering
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Thanks, Michael. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. I like to try different genres. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I like how this sounds. Puts me in mind of Justin Cronin’s The Passage.
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Thanks, Sascha. I’m pleased you liked the story, how it sounds. It’s a genre I haven’t tried before. I’ve made a note of Justin Cronin’s book, The Passage. 🙂 — Suzanne
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It’s long but a good read.
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Creepy! You set the dystopian scene beautifully.
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Thanks, Cindy. I’m pleased you liked the story and found it creepy. I was trying for that. I’m also glad you thought I set the scene well. This is a different genre for me. 🙂 — Suzanne
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it looks like it would be a fight to the finish. at least, they are prepared and ready to face the mutants.
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Thanks, Plaridel. It’ll be a tough fight no doubt. The mutants are desperate. These troops are battle-hardened, though and have survived other attacks. They need to survive until daylight when the mutants will creep back to their caves carrying their dead and wounded who would be better off if left behind. All the mutants have on their side is their numbers. I’m glad you enjoyed the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Well crafted … but … chilling.
Isadora 😎
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Thanks, Isadora. I’m pleased you liked the story and found it well written. I was trying for chilling so I’m glad I succeeded. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Survival is a full time job. I hope they out number (or out gun) the mutants. Good story.
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Thanks, Russell. I’m glad you liked the story. I’m sure they outgunned the mutants. The mutants lived a rough life so they may have also outnumbered them. The mutants were just desperate. No one outside a group was safe in that dystopian land though. Humans traveled in armed groups or not at all. —- Suzanne
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Yikes! Number crunching takes a whole new meaning with the mutants around.
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Thanks, Subroto. I’m pleased you liked the story. Yes, it could get messy. 🙂 — Suzanne
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You’ve described this so well I want to say “Eww!”
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Thanks, Dawn. I know what you mean. I’m pleased you liked the story. I can write about it but I had to quit watching the TV show “The Walking Dead” even though I knew it wasn’t real. Even my daughter said that show gave her nightmares. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I hope those guardsmen stay awake! You’ve given us history and built a great sense of unease in this.
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Thanks, Sarah Ann. I hope it’s not our real history. That’s really a scary thought. I’m pleased I succeeded in giving a sense of unease. I’m glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Such a peaceful picture and yet… you’ve got us all in a state!
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Thanks, Dale. I’m glad you liked the story. Sorry, I messed up that peaceful picture Sandra sent in. I hope my story doesn’t turn out to be a forecast of our real future. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Where’s Mad Max when you need him? :o)
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Thanks, Mrs. I know, right? Those human soldiers need all the help they can get. I’m glad you liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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A touch of apocalyptic horror, nicely done
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Thanks, Michael. I’m pleased you liked the story, thought it well done. It’s not my usual genre. 🙂 — Suzanne
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This brought back two memorable movies for me (though “apocalyptic” isn’t my favorite movie genre, by any means):
I Am Legend (with Will Smith)
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The Road (with Viggo Mortensen)
Thought I acknowledge its merit and craft, I really wish I’d never seen the latter! But your piece here brought back scenes from both. That means you captured the essence, for sure. Good job!
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Thanks, Erik. What a complementary comment writing my little story “captured the essence” of those big movies. I appreciate it I have yet to see The Road but I did see I Am Legend on TV. My son subscribed to Netflix for me so The Road may turn up on there. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I Am Legend, for all its loneliness and isolation, ended with hope. Some would say that The Road does as well, but if it’s there, it’s so slight as to be negligible. And some of the scenes (and implied scenes) are so horrific that I felt “off” for about a week afterward. Fair warning. Perhaps you are a braver soul than I.
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Thanks, Erik. If it’s that strongly negative, I probably wouldn’t like it either. Thanks for the warning. —- Suzanne
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