The Spanish hacienda

This is my contribution to Monday’s Finish the Story for this week. Every Monday a new picture prompt is given along with the first sentence to be used for the story. The story is to be written with only 100 to 150 additional words. I’ve bolded the first sentence given with the picture prompt.

The link for all other stories is as follows:

Genre:  Speculative Fiction

Word Count:  150+13+2=165 Words


The house of Don Francisco sat in a remote part of the desert. It had been part of the large estate of the Don, a land grant from the crown in Spain in the 1600’s to his great grandfather, a conquistador or Spanish conqueror.

Don Francisco had an administrator and the estate prospered although no one knew how. No one knew the evil that visited there.

It was far from the closest town, and there were no herds of cattle. No cattle could have survived on that arid land. Nothing would grow. His children and administrator knew the secret, but no one else.

Once night was heard, “No-o-o-o, ah-y-e-e-e.” Wham. Crunch. In the morning, Don Francisco’s body was found torn apart, blood  everywhere. His children quietly buried him in the desert and sold the property, traveling to Spain where they had relatives. The buyer was never disclosed, and the property stood empty until it fell to ruin. No one would go near.

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20 thoughts on “DON FRANCISCO

    • Thanks Bjorn. Yes, you don’t make deals with the devil. It could be he wanted that spot left alone and somehow made it possible for the children to leave and go to Spain. Maybe it’s the location of the fabled gate to hell. O_o 🙂 — Suzanne


    • Thanks Summer. That looked to be some kind of U.S.government building as the flag is prominently displayed and the building is beautifully kept up. I did enjoy writing my story. I did a bit of research for that one. Thanks for the encouragement. Best wishes for 2015 to you also. 🙂 — Suzanne


    • Thanks Yarnspinnerr. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I guess there is room there for a continuence of the story like evil returning to the spot and attacking someone who goes there or something. I’ll think about it. 🙂 — Suzanne

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