Copyright: Barbara W. Beacham
This is my weekly contribution to Monday’s Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara W. Beacham. Every Monday, Barbara supplies a new picture prompt along with the first sentence for the story. The original story to be written should have only 100 to 150 additional words. I’ve bolded the first sentence given with the picture prompt. Be sure to click on the little blue frog in the blue box, after clicking on the link, to read the other stories.
The link for all the other stories is as follows:
https://mondaysfinishthestory.wordpress.com/2015/05/18/mondays-finish-the-story-may-18th-2015/
Genre: Humor Fiction
Word Count: 3+11+150=164 Words
A DANGEROUS ASSIGNMENT by P.S. Joshi
The crew of the Angel Flame received orders to head out.
The Commanding Officer on board the sub was Commander Oliver J. Periwinkle. His years of service showed in the lines on his face. This assignment would add more.
“Skipper,” said his Executive Officer, Chief Bradley Blankton. “This’ll be a dangerous venture.”
“Yes,” said the Skipper. “I’m afraid we’ll meet with trouble. The President’s sent us since this ‘is’ the finest crew in the Navy.”
“Sir,” said the Chief, “Did you say that an enemy sub had been spotted off the coast of Alaska? Has it been identified?”
“Not yet,” said the Skipper. “That’ll be our job. We better be accurate as we don’t want to blow up the thing before we find out where it’s come from.”
“Ollie Periwinkle, are you daydreaming again?”
His aunt’s voice blasted at him, and he jumped straight up.
He grabbed a stubborn pea pod and attacked each seam vigorously. Peas rained down.
Poor Ollie. His daydreams are much more fun than shelling peas!
I loved the “lines in the face” thing in the first paragraph.
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Thanks, Ali. I felt sorry for Ollie as well. He was just setting out on the adventure and had to go back to the shelling. 😦 I’m glad you liked the story, especially the “lines.” 🙂 — Suzanne
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Ha ha! I got a surprise out of that one. Cute story.
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Thanks, Diana. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story. I had fun with that one. 😀 — Suzanne
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I am on Ollie’s side – podding peas is too tedious, I’d be daydreaming as well. Lovely story 🙂
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Thanks, Sonya. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I agree. Daydreaming beats shelling peas any time. 😀 — Suzanne
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Love the story! Daydreaming can take us to many places! Thanks for writing again, and be well Suzanne! ^..^
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Thanks, Barbara. I’m so glad you loved the story. I enjoy writing for these prompts. You be well also. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you Suzanne!
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Poor lamb. Nothing wrong with a bit of daydreaming, it’s how many authors start off.
xxx Huge Hugs xxx
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Thanks, David. I totally agree. I love kids who daydream and have imaginations. Probably because I did. So did both my parents, so I came by it honestly. I must have passed it along to my kids. I’m so glad you liked the story. I had fun with that one. Huge Hugs back to you. 😀 — Suzanne
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Loved the word portrait of Ollie.
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Thanks, Yarnspinnerr. I’m so glad you like the story. I enjoyed writing it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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and I enjoyed reading it. 🙂
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I wish the Aunt didn’t disturb him..it was turning out to be a true adventure 🙂 Nice one.
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Thanks, Ansumani. Maybe he’ll go back and finish the story after shelling the peas. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I’ve shelled peas… daydreaming is so much more fun!!!! Great story!!!!
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Thanks, Coastal Quill. I totally agree with you. I’m so glad you really liked the story. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Loved this story and how it ended. Haha! A little boy daydreaming. 🙂
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Thanks, Joy. I’m so glad you loved the story. I enjoyed writing it. 😀 — Suzanne
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It’s fun writing those type of stories. 🙂
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I enjoy it too, Joy. 😀
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Hahaha, what a cute story!
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Thanks, OnChi. I’m so glad you thought the story was funny. I had fun writing it. 😀 — Suzanne
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I personally like daydreaming as a way of releasing stress and it’s a good way to spark creativity. I’m just glad I don’t have an aunt who could rain on my parade. Ollie should find a spot up on a tree where he can daydream away from his aunt 🙂
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Thanks, Rosanna. I agree totally with you. Some adults don’t understand the need for daydreaming. Hopefully Ollie will find a place he can do it in peace. 🙂 — Suzanne
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There is danger, and there is danger. Lovely!
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Thanks, Olga. I’m so pleased you liked the story. I enjoyed writing it. 🙂 — Suzanne
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” His years of service showed in the lines on his face.” A great line! Loved the ending!
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Thanks, Roger. I’m so happy you liked the story. I enjoyed writing that one. 😀 — Suzanne
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